You are so talented. My husband and I are listening to this, in awe. We love your music, background sounds, the cadence of your voice. This is awesome CJ
I like what you've said here. The rhyme helps for memory, too.
And I always have to say, all my short stories are fictional. They are a great tool for me to express emotion, to create something tangible that I can, in terms, let go of, and relax the mental. For me, I enjoy opening new perspectives and sharing my findings with others.
Thanks fot your engagement.
I'd live to hear any more you have—if you had any specific parts that stood out to you. 😊😘
Dynamic Queen, thank you! This story was a challenge to write with many moments of burden. What was your favorite part or biggest take-away? I'd love to hear back from you.
I appreciate your comment. And skilled observation. As I did put forth very much emotion in this. I'm glad that you found it, or that I found you. Depending on how you look at it. I do have a few other stories narrated on my archive page here on substack. Please welcome yourself to any of them whenever you'd like. Hope to chat soon! Bye for now. 💛
How you weave memory, regret, and resignation together is both heartbreaking and deeply human. I especially loved the recurring theme of overlooked essentials, how we take things (and people) for granted until it’s too late.
The points you made about reoccurring themes of overlooked essentials is right on target. Glad you recognized it and how those small things can end up being so unexpectedly impactful.
A great compliment imo because that's exactly what I was hoping to convey.
Also, you mentioned feeling heartbroken and noticing deeply human things. What part(s) stood out most or felt particularly relatable?
the bittersweet realization "I once thought my love was enough for the both of us—I thought my love was reciprocal. I should have wished for more. For happiness, maybe?But I didn't. Instead, I had wished for truthfulness—for understanding. I'd wished for the gift of insight. I thought honesty was gold. I thought it could cure the world. "
feel so deeply human...these are the kinds of thoughts we all wrestle with when coming out of naivete, when we start to see love and truth in a more complicated light. Wjich was beautifully done.
I love that you pointed this section out. Probably one of the most challenging to find the right wording for. Which is ironic in some ways too. The simplicity of this complexity. I hope to cross paths with you again in the future.
You are so talented. My husband and I are listening to this, in awe. We love your music, background sounds, the cadence of your voice. This is awesome CJ
The saddest thing is not the end of life, but the reason for which it all came to a knife.
Please, be happy.
I like what you've said here. The rhyme helps for memory, too.
And I always have to say, all my short stories are fictional. They are a great tool for me to express emotion, to create something tangible that I can, in terms, let go of, and relax the mental. For me, I enjoy opening new perspectives and sharing my findings with others.
Thanks fot your engagement.
I'd live to hear any more you have—if you had any specific parts that stood out to you. 😊😘
Love it!
Dynamic Queen, thank you! This story was a challenge to write with many moments of burden. What was your favorite part or biggest take-away? I'd love to hear back from you.
I honestly relate with you though I'm a teenager I assume you're older ,but I've liked the way you put forward your emotions.I RESONATED WITH THIS.
I appreciate your comment. And skilled observation. As I did put forth very much emotion in this. I'm glad that you found it, or that I found you. Depending on how you look at it. I do have a few other stories narrated on my archive page here on substack. Please welcome yourself to any of them whenever you'd like. Hope to chat soon! Bye for now. 💛
This piece hit my heart.
❤ Hopefully it hit you in a "tough-love" kind of way, and not something else. What was it that got you feeling this way?
How you weave memory, regret, and resignation together is both heartbreaking and deeply human. I especially loved the recurring theme of overlooked essentials, how we take things (and people) for granted until it’s too late.
Thanks so much for sharing!
The points you made about reoccurring themes of overlooked essentials is right on target. Glad you recognized it and how those small things can end up being so unexpectedly impactful.
A great compliment imo because that's exactly what I was hoping to convey.
Also, you mentioned feeling heartbroken and noticing deeply human things. What part(s) stood out most or felt particularly relatable?
I'd love to hear more about your perspective!
And the quiet resignation on this line " I suppose that's my cue—my turn to fade away... I let go "
I guess what Im trying to say was, that you've done swell job in putting into words what we as humans feel, does that make sense?
It absolutely does! I thank you for your kind words. I've a few more stories on my page, if you'd like to give any of my other works a go. ❤
the bittersweet realization "I once thought my love was enough for the both of us—I thought my love was reciprocal. I should have wished for more. For happiness, maybe?But I didn't. Instead, I had wished for truthfulness—for understanding. I'd wished for the gift of insight. I thought honesty was gold. I thought it could cure the world. "
feel so deeply human...these are the kinds of thoughts we all wrestle with when coming out of naivete, when we start to see love and truth in a more complicated light. Wjich was beautifully done.
Or, wait... Is it, "complexity to this simplicity?" I dunno.
I love that you pointed this section out. Probably one of the most challenging to find the right wording for. Which is ironic in some ways too. The simplicity of this complexity. I hope to cross paths with you again in the future.